Ran through Sibyl Vane's song Obsess Over You with Ashleigh Moore. I learned that the key was not suited to a woman so I will be transposing the song down. The more I think about this song the moor I question how I should really approach Dorian and Sibyl's relationship. The song is fun and catchy but as of now it doesn't feel appropriate. I am currently working on their date scene. I want their feelings (at least Sibyl's) to be very genuine. The audience should root for the two of them.
I rewrote the opening. Basil comes onstage and begins the show with a new song:
Basil:
I have seen an Angel standing before me naked.
He took away my pain.
Forbidden I made love to an Angel.
He turned my head toward the moonlight and
told me I was beautiful.
I gave myself to an Angel.
He touched me where the truth burned and
released my inner demons to the world.
And what I saw inside this Angel was a sanctuary
to run to in despair.
So then I painted an Angel.
I'm hoping this will establish Basil's feelings for Dorian from the start of the play so that the feelings of jealousy he feels are better understood.
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